Thursday, September 25, 2008

8: Blogger Review - Reviewing My Blog

The following is a revised version of my first blog. The main revisions which have been made involve sentence structure, length, and incorporation of links into sentences.

The senate legislation is attempting to double the amount of legal immigrants allowed into the U.S., and grant amnesty to all those who are already here illegally. While there are some who feel that this is fair, there are others who believe this could have a severe impact on our countries economy, and perhaps even promote illegal immigration.

Life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness are the human rights that are at steak here. Because this is an idea that is accepted globally, it applies to all people. Every person is born with these "human rights." People in Mexico, or any other country, who wish to live a better life ideally have the right to. For those who support the idea of allowing more immigrants, they would agree that their right to liberty means they should be allowed to go wherever they please, and the pursuit of happiness means they should do whatever makes them happy, even if they need to immigrate to another country to do it. The counter argument is that they are only allowed liberty and the pursuit of happiness within their own country.

Personally, I feel is if it would be great if we would allow more immigrants in, and certainly for us to grant amnesty to the ones already here. It doesn't seem fair that they should be forced to live horrible lives in countries with poor economies, while we continue to consume and elevate ourselves. Our economy is certainly suffering right now, but not nearly as hard as some of theirs. They are all born with the right to life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness, and that should be fully allowed to them - no matter who their parents are or what country they were born in.

In the article I used to research this topic, I noticed a pattern in the writing. What I noticed was that in each bulletpoint, the negative side of immigration always came last. It seems as if this article is anti-immigration. This is because the focus of it is on the controversy about allowing this, rather than the good that could come of it.

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